The excessive length of this rather cumbersome sentence from Miss Peregrine’s Home For Peculiar Children by Ransom Riggs, which begins 5 lines before the section photographed, is awkward…
But am I having a brain freeze moment here?
My brain balks at the clumsiness of the whom in the following sentence.
I kind of know it is right and can probably conjure up an explanation which is likely to use phrases like
it is an objective relative pronoun introducing a relative clause in which Ricky is the object of the verb phrase “surprised to see” which would naturally attract the personal pronoun him if re-written as “I was surprised to see him lingering near the punch bowl”.
But it still feels awkward.
As I say, possibly a minor inherent awkwardness exacerbated by an excessively long sentence.
Editors, where was your red pencil?